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Re: Proofreading

Postby CodeBlower » Sat Oct 07, 2017 10:42 pm

Assassin's Price
ePub version

Chapter 13
p. 188
"I'm encountered a few," ..
I'm -> I've

Chapter 22
p. 293
"They know I'm exaggerating slightly, but it does no harm, just as most men like to be told that that they dance well, even when they can barely avoid planting their feet on their partner's shoes."
(drop one "that")
"Budge up, yeh great lump." -- Hagrid, HP:SS
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Re: Proofreading

Postby KevinT » Mon Oct 30, 2017 10:54 am

Chapter 6 of Assassin's Price (Kindle Edition)


"For the next three glasses, Subcommander Luerryn and Alastar rode through every lane in..."

Should be "...Subcommander and Charyn...".

Also, in Chapter 11 when describing Malyna’s first dinner at Chateau d’Rex:

"Charyn found that the seating had been changed so that he still sat on his father’s right, with his mother at the other end, but Aloryana was seated beside him, while Bhayrn sat on his mother’s right, and Malyna on Lorien’s right, which meant that Charyn was seated right across from Malyna."

Both Charyn and malyna can't both be seated to Lorien's immediate right, so I suspect that it should have been either:

"...Malyna on Lorien's left...", or
"Malyna on Bhayrn's right..."
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Re: Proofreading

Postby KevinT » Thu Nov 16, 2017 12:10 pm

Assassin's Price, first sentence of Chapter 51 (Kindle Edition)

“When Charyn woke on Solyai morning...”

I believe "Solayi" was intended.

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Chapter 64, second paragraph

By the time, he reached the study...

That first comma probably shouldn't be there. The whole paragraph seems a bit like a run-on sentence, but maybe that's just me.

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Re: Proofreading

Postby CodeBlower » Mon Feb 19, 2018 12:25 pm

Mongrel Mage
hardcover version

p. 174 (several pages into Chapter XXIII)
4th line from the top:
"The city didn't really felt that much .."
felt -> feel

p. 486
Chapter LXV, 2nd paragraph, last sentence
".. decided he didn't want to know that badly what Zandyr was so exercised about."
exercised -> excited?
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Re: Proofreading

Postby lmodesitt » Mon Feb 19, 2018 1:06 pm

Thank you.

The second one isn't a typo. It's a proper but seldom seen usage meaning roughly "all steamed up," but since Recluce doesn't have steam power at this time...


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Re: Proofreading

Postby CodeBlower » Wed May 16, 2018 4:55 pm

;)

Just finished "Recluce Tales".

It took forever because: (a) things have been crazy, (b) I feel like I need a little sorbet between each "course".

I didn't find anything to report -- and thoroughly enjoyed myself -- although (as you noted in the introductions) the stories don't always end up going where I thought they would.
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